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== NPOV dispute == |
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EDIT: I have now removed much if not all of the remarks exemplified below as per Misplaced Pages's guidelines ref. slanderous and non-sourced material. |
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There are a few alarming remarks in this article. Select parts of the page are very immaturely written and composed, and display obvious negative bias for the person in question. I will list a few examples below. There is also a major lack of sources for the quotes provied. |
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1. - line 3 of the Career section (immature / bias) |
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2. - line 5 of the Career section (immature / bias) |
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3. - line 6 of the Career section (first sentence incomprehensible) |
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5. - line 12 of the Career section (profanity / bias / immature) |
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] (]) 01:33, 27 January 2013 (UTC) |
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==Removal of Unfounded Claims== |
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Hi. There are some frankly bizarre claims that have been added to this article and haven't been challenged by other editors, e.g. Dany Bahar is a yodler. I'll be working to have these inaccuracies removed on behalf of my client, unless anyone can cite evidence to the contrary. Please contact me on my Talk Page of you want to discuss this further. Thanks ] (]) 11:44, 20 February 2013 (UTC) |
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==Suggested Changes== |
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Hi. If somebody could please review my suggested changes to the Dany Bahar article, outlined in more detail below. My additional content and references have been highlighted in <b>bold</b> and are focused on the Personal Background and Career sections of the article. <br> If you have any questions then do contact me on my Talk Page. Many thanks ] (]) 17:00, 28 February 2013 (UTC) |
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===Personal Background=== |
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Dany Bahar grew up in the picturesque Swiss town of Silvaplana following his parents relocation not long after his birth. He is married to Anett Johansson <b>(daughter of recruiter Björn Johansson)</b> with whom he has three children. Dany divides his time between Switzerland, where he holds citizenship, Austria and Dubai, balancing family life with various business interests.<ref></ref> |
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===Career=== |
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He achieved a Bachelor in Economics and Marketing and then went on to gain an MBA in Economics and Marketing studying in both Vienna and <b>Geneva</b>.<ref></ref> In the early 90's, he began his professional sports marketing career working in inline-skating before moving on to work for the President of the International Roller Sports Federation.<ref></ref> In mid-2001 Dany Bahar began working for the Fritz Kaiser Group (FKG), a wealth management company based in Lichtenstein. <b> At FKG, Bahar took on the responsibility for some of the company’s most important client accounts including that of Red Bull owner Dietrich Mateschitz.</b> <ref></ref> |
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Mateschitz recruited Bahar in late 2002, <b>making him Head of Corporate Projects Business at Red Bull GmbH with responsibility for overall corporate business development and branding.</b> During his time at Red Bull, Bahar <b>led</b> the diversification of the brand into NASCAR and football with the acquisition of teams in Salzburg, New York and Ghana.<ref></ref> <b>He also orchestrated Red Bull’s purchase of the Jaguar and Minardi F1 teams, which were rebranded as Red Bull Racing and Scuderia Toro Rosso.<b/> <ref></ref> In 2006 a move to Ferrari followed where Bahar took on</b> the role of Senior Vice President, Commercial and Brand responsible for worldwide car sales and aftersales. In addition to this, Bahar oversaw the road car and F1 marketing activities, licensing and merchandising.<ref></ref> Bahar’s emphasis at Ferrari was ensuring that the products were <b>client-led</b> rather than <b>engineering-led and</b> ensuring that the needs of the client were paramount. He took a fresh outlook to Ferrari’s traditional approach to activities such as car launches with the online launch of the California allowing the car maker to appeal to a wider, younger audience. Bahar also increased the merchandising activity. |
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<b>In 2009</b> Bahar was approached by Group Lotus owners Proton Holdings Behad. After putting together a five-year business plan to return the company to profit, Bahar accepted the offer and began his tenure as Chief Executive Officer of Group Lotus where he remained in charge until June 2012.<ref></ref> <ref></ref> |
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:{{A note}}This change needs much work to be accepted. Firstly the references need to be fixed then we will address the neutrality issues. Use ]. If you really want to make changes to this article you will need to improve your wiki knowledge.]]] 23:25, 28 February 2013 (UTC) |
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::There are a few suggestions I would put forward with these changes: |
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::# As per Geremy's suggestions, you need some help with writing footnotes. ] is a good place to start, as is the template documentation at {{tl|Cite web}}. |
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::# It's difficult for non-German speakers to evaluate whether these references are ]. Perhaps someone fluent in German who is listed in the ] can assist with this. |
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::# This source is to a message forum, which is a ] and not considered reliable. It mentions information from "Italispeed" so if that source can be located, link to it and then it's reliability can be evaluated. |
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::# This source looks like a press release aggregator and the actual source is here . |
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::# Adjectives like "renowned", "reputable", "right hand man" and "driving force" are considered ] because they only serve to inflate the importance of what they're describing instead of imparting objective information. |
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::I would rewrite your submission with these suggestions and resubmit it here for further evalution. --] (]) 00:00, 3 March 2013 (UTC) |
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I've been asked about the reliability of the cited sources. Bilanz.ch is a reputed Swiss financial news magazine, and a reliable source. insideparadeplatz.ch is probably ... semi-reliable: it's a news website run by a veteran economic affairs journalist, ], who has been associated with noted scoops as well as some reporting failures, according to the sources cited in the de.wp article. It has no editorial oversight, but meets the conditions of ]: "Self-published expert sources may be considered reliable when produced by an established expert on the subject matter, whose work in the relevant field has previously been published by reliable third-party publications." <small><span style="border:1px solid black;padding:1px;">]</span></small> 20:03, 3 March 2013 (UTC) |
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{{A note}}Reads much better now and is a concise rendition of what's already in the article. The only two remaining hang ups I see at this time are<br> |
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1) the use of the term '''headhunter'''. Although business oriented minds may very well be familiar with this term I think the word ] or recruited would be more suitable for mass consumption on Misplaced Pages. It's a lowest common denominator issue. We can't use the wikified ] because it leads to a disambiguation page.<br> |
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2)That lead sentence is just one long run-on sentence with no less than 4 commas. Chop up that '''Personal background''' and fill it out with some content. |
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I know you're in PR and this must seem like shackles on your wrists. A watered-down version of what's best for your client but this is Misplaced Pages. A powerful tool if used right, no doubt. There are caveats to using the website ranked 7 in traffic in the US, 6th in Global traffic<ref>http://www.alexa.com/siteinfo/wikipedia.org#</ref>. This current submission, although not the fanfare common from the PR engine will most likely be approved by unassociated editors. Another to consider is an ] and get a nice picture of him up if you wish. That wouldn't by against NPOV policy. Upload it to .]]] 15:34, 4 March 2013 (UTC) |
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Hi Geremy, thanks for these further suggestions – I've now made those changes. Let me know when you're happy for me to update the article accordingly. On your last point concerning PR – my primary intention has been to remove glaring inaccuracies, inserted anonymously, that had compromised the article and which no other users were in any hurry to rectify. We have met with Jimmy Wales in person; our relationship with Misplaced Pages is completely transparent and we are fully aware that working with the community is the only way to go. No one’s being shackled here – I appreciate your help and understand and respect the caveats you're talking about. Thanks again.] (]) 16:55, 4 March 2013 (UTC) |
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:You don't need my permission to proceed you've followed ] to avoid action against you. You've satisfied the concerns of the editors involved, thanks for contacting me.]]] 13:31, 5 March 2013 (UTC) |
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==Article rewrite== |
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Hi – I've put together a ] that addresses the multiple issues flagged here and is intended as a replacement for this version. It is properly sourced, well structured and neutrally worded. I have a COI in that I work for Bell Pottinger and Dany Bahar is my client. I have made this clear on my user page and on ]. If someone could take a look and post here or on my talk page that would be great. Many thanks. ] (]) 01:12, 8 November 2014 (UTC) |
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: That reads like advertising. Compare the BBC's capsule bio., or the one from Business Week. |
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: If you want to improve the article, here are a few things you can do to get started. |
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:* Provide a photo, by taking one and uploading it to Misplaced Pages. That you can do even with a COI. Simple headshots are preferred. |
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:* Provide solid citations for educational background. What schools, what degrees, year of graduation. Reliable sources per ] are necessary. |
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:* Mr. Bahar is not listed in the history of the International Roller Sports Association. A cite for that is needed. |
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::] (]) 18:50, 8 November 2014 (UTC) |
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::], you misunderstand me – I'm well aware of this existing article on Dany Bahar, but it's clearly lacking in quality, uses peacock terms (needs of the client paramount, fresh outlook, reignited, etc.), lacks relevant details of his various roles, is poorly referenced and its neutrality is disputed. The tag suggests a rewrite may be needed, hence I've rewritten it. If you think the tone of my draft isn't neutral, please indicate where and why and I will amend it for you to take another look. Given the peacock terms of this article I think the draft compares favourably. Many thanks. ] (]) 10:17, 11 November 2014 (UTC) |
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::: OK, removed some of the peacocking. Left the part about switching Ferrari from an engineering focus to a customer-satisfaction focus. Compare ] of GM, who did did something similar there. In general, replacing an entire article, especially from a COI position, is discouraged on Misplaced Pages. Are there any factual errors that need to be fixed? ] (]) 20:28, 11 November 2014 (UTC) |
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{{od}} |
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Hi ], |
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Happy New Year and I'm sorry to have taken a while to reply. There aren't any errors exactly but there are widely reported details about various aspects of his career that are missing and the Lotus section is not up-to-date – Mr Bahar filed a claim against Lotus in 2012 and an out-of-court settlement was reached last year. |
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I’ve gone through my draft again and removed anything that could be construed as promotional, but COI or not I have to say I’m struggling to see what’s promotional about it or how it could be seen as inferior to what's here. Let me outline the ways in which I think it’s an improvement: |
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1. Clearer structure |
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2. Better sources: |
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In expanding this article I have not relied on poor sources. The only good quality mainstream media sources the current version uses are the BBC and the New York Times. While my draft also has some of the lower-tier outlets referenced in the current article, as well as some others, it also includes: |
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*BBC articles (x3) |
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*New York Times |
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*Sunday Times |
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*Bilanz – a prominent Swiss publication |
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*Bloomberg |
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*Wall Street Journal |
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*Telegraph |
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*Financial Times |
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As well as the Daily Mail and Top Gear Magazine. |
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3. More in-depth: |
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*Schooling: Name of school in Switzerland |
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*Inline skating and roller sports: Named the presidents he supported |
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*Red Bull: Entry into Formula One, COO position, New York MetroStars rebrand |
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*Ferrari: New global brand department, expanded number of retail stores |
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*Lotus: Context and strategy of five-year plan (unprofitable for 15 years, move from low-margin model to compete with big marques, targeting China & emerging markets); Lotus Renault GP F1 team; showroom in Beijing; Proton’s new owners (DRB-Hicom); brought the account of his dismissal up to date (widely reported claim against Lotus, out-of-court settlement last year) – the current article leaves the Lotus story unresolved and simply quotes a statement from 2012, even using the present tense (‘reads’) |
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*ARES: Perhaps this is what you think reads like advertising – it’s hard to see another way of going into a little more detail than your sentence does about what this company actually does, the designers working there and the specific models it adapts. |
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4. More encyclopaedic: |
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I’d argue my draft is actually more encyclopaedic – peacock terms and business language are still a problem in the current version: |
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* ‘…fresh outlook…’ |
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*‘…wider, younger audience…’ |
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*‘…reignited…’ |
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*‘…global reach…’ |
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I wonder if my COI might have prompted you to be a little hasty in dismissing content that is actually a lot better than what’s currently there. I’d therefore be really grateful if you could revisit and reconsider my draft. If you’re still unhappy with the idea of a move then let’s work towards a way of incorporating what’s good about each version into an improved article, as something clearly needs to be done to address the multiple issues listed in the tag. Thanks very much. ] (]) 15:39, 8 January 2015 (UTC) |
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::I have reviewed the draft and found it to be of sufficient quality to be worth my time. I did some trimming and copyediting to remove promotional or editorialized language. I also checked a few sources randomly, especially in areas where a COI editor often uses a source that is about the company, but does not actually mention the article-subject, and found that the sources did in fact support the article-text and were about the article-subject. I also found that the quality and sourcing of this editor's contributions have improved since last time I saw their work into an imperfect, but definitely above-average grade, especially in the COI-realm of quality comparisons; COI is discouraged because it tends to be junk, but we should encourage an editor such as this that is doing good work in-spite of it, in the rare incidences where that occures. |
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::I only have two questions: (a) What did the audit find out about Dany that resulted in him being fired? and (b) What were the terms of the out-of-court settlement? If you can answer those two questions, using quoted text from a source to answer them, I'd be happy to make a couple tweaks and move your draft into article-space. Of course that may result in drama, but sometimes it's hard to get anything done around here without it. I can also just mozy on somewhere else if you prefer to avoid it. ] (]) 22:51, 19 January 2015 (UTC) |
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Hi ], thanks for looking at this. In answer to your questions: |
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a) There was never any official reason given for his dismissal in June 2012, but the allegations that were rife at the time were of misuse of company funds (the “improper or unauthorised spending” referred to in the statement from the , ref 13 in the current version). While it’s probably true that he could have been more frugal while he was at Lotus he never acted without board approval or outside the limits of his authority, which is why he filed for wrongful dismissal. |
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b) The settlement was contingent on the terms not being disclosed – details of Dany's claim (see below) were reported, but all that was announced as far as the actual settlement goes was that the two sides had agreed to withdraw their claims against each other. |
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The sequence of events was: |
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*May 2012: DRB announced that he had been "temporarily suspended from his role, to facilitate an investigation into a complaint about his conduct" as reported in the . |
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*June 2012: Group Lotus announced that he’d been dismissed following the results of DRB’s investigation; this doesn’t actually seem to have been reported by mainstream media at the time but was widely covered in trade media and various automotive blogs and outlets – is probably the most comprehensive as it includes the Lotus statement of 7 June: |
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:''Group Lotus plc (“Lotus” or the “Company”) can today confirm that, Mr Dany Bahar has been terminated from his employment as Chief Executive Officer of Lotus with immediate effect.'' |
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:''The decision was made by the Board of Group Lotus plc following the results of an investigation into a complaint made against him by the company’s penultimate holding company, DRB-HICOM Berhad.'' |
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:That article also mentions that Car Magazine tried to contact Lotus but that they “refused to be drawn on the reasons for Bahar’s exit”. |
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*August 2012: Dany filed a £6.7m law suit against Lotus and DRB for unfair dismissal (), DRB said it would vigorously oppose the claim but was still circumspect about the reasons for his dismissal: |
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:''“Dany Bahar was dismissed after an investigation into his stewardship of Lotus,” DRB said in the statement. “We believe we have acted properly at all times.”'' |
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*October 2012: Lotus filed a counterclaim against Dany that sought to recoup roughly £2.5m for “unauthorized expenses and overpaid salary and bonuses”. This from November 2012 covers it, and includes the statement from Proton (the parent company DRB had bought) that’s also quoted piecemeal in the 2012 : |
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:''The Proton board felt Bahar had “done an ‘abysmal’ job as CEO, was excessively extravagant and mercenary and was preoccupied with his own interests,” according to the Lotus counterclaim. His expenses “were all the more unacceptable given that his brief was to turn the business around, which he singularly failed to do.”'' |
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:So that was part of the Lotus counterclaim but still not an official reason for his dismissal. |
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*May 2014: It was reported that Dany had settled his claim for unfair dismissal a month before the case was due to be heard in the High Court in London. is the best source. DRB’s statement was: |
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:''“DRB-Hicom wishes to announce that the parties involved in the legal suit have signed a Settlement Agreement and Release…and have agreed to withdraw their claims against each other.”'' |
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:No details of the settlement were reported as he had to sign a confidentiality agreement (that's original research, it wasn’t reported), but it was reported () that he had claimed that the terms of his contract, which had been renewed for a further period up to September 2015, entitled him to 5% of Lotus’s value in the event of a sale, and that Lotus had fired him ahead of the sale to DRB to get round this clause. |
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That’s the sequence of events as reported. At the time all the media were reporting that the word on the street was it was to do with expenses, but that was never officially announced. There are a couple more sources (albeit a bit of tittle-tattle, especially the second one from Jalopnik) that might shed a bit more light on it: |
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* (2 June 2012): The Mail reporting that “friends” of Dany insisted that “all expenditure was specifically written into his contract”, that he “had permission to use helicopters and jets because this was the way that business was done in the supercharged world of Formula 1”, and that he also had permission “to approve expenditure up to £5million and to do up his rented house for about £35,000.” |
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* (16 July 2012): ‘The Real Reason Lotus Fired CEO Dany Bahar Isn't The One They Gave’ |
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:''Officially, Lotus fired CEO Dany Bahar because he misused funds and not because he was a disaster in almost every way. Unofficially, we're hearing that Lotus Cars advisory board member "Maximum" Bob Lutz is telling people the opposite in private. |
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:''Rumor has it that Lutz is actually telling people the company was looking for any excuse to get Bahar out of his contract. The fact that the CEO had apparently been using company funds to renovate his personal properties and to pay for private aircraft at a time when the company was struggling seemed to fit the bill nicely so that's what they went with.'' |
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:That also links to a on Jalopnik criticising his performance at Lotus. |
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So while the mainstream coverage and the official statements that came out might not provide definitive answers to either of your questions, this is the order of events and these are, to my knowledge, the best sources for that sequence of events. In reality, it’s likely that the new owners didn’t like him and what he stood for, didn’t like the people he’d brought on board, didn’t approve of his five-year plan (which he’d kicked off with an unprecedented unveiling of five new models at the 2010 Paris Motorshow), and thought his expenses were profligate at a time when the company was struggling. There’s plenty of criticism along these lines in the various blogs of what he did at Lotus – it’s a big marque, his strategy was fairly radical and it arouses strong feelings – but there are also one or two who have defended him, like (‘I don't think former Lotus chief Dany Bahar was a bad man’ – May 2014). He writes that he interviewed Dany several times and that they were in agreement that “there simply weren’t enough Elise-Exige buyers in the world to sustain the company”, i.e., that something had to change and change fast. ] (]) 16:35, 20 January 2015 (UTC) |
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:::{{done}}. The above-text was too long, so I just checked out some of the sources and re-wrote some of it. The company also filed suit against Bahar for his alleged mis-spending, which is worth noting. The primary issue at-hand seems to be alleged extravagant spending, which the prior version did not seem to make clear. If you could add an infobox with a freely licensed image, that would be a great improvement as well. ] (]) 17:11, 20 January 2015 (UTC) |
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::::Hi ], yes I mentioned Lotus’s suit, that was the counterclaim (October) in response to Dany’s suit for wrongful dismissal – Dany's came first as the Bloomberg article makes clear (it’s the only source I’ve found that does make that clear). Also it was never actually reported that this was what the investigation found – Proton made the statement about expenses in relation to Lotus’s counterclaim. |
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::::Would you consider this perhaps: |
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::::''Following an internal investigation, amid allegations that he was misusing company funds for extravagant expenses, Bahar was dismissed from his role as CEO in June 2012. That August, he sued DRB and Lotus for £6.7m for wrongful dismissal, claiming Lotus had dismissed him to avoid paying the five percent of the company's value he was owed in the event of an acquisition. Lotus later sued Bahar for £2.5m ($4 million) in an effort it said was to recoup some of the money he had spent. An out-of-court settlement was reached in May 2014.'' |
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::::Noted re infobox and image, I can do both. Thanks. ] (]) 17:30, 20 January 2015 (UTC) |
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:::::That looks fine. Your comment is accurate that I rather made an assumption that the investigation must have found that the allegations are true, since it led to his being fired, but it didn't explicitly say that. The version above is better. Do you mind adding cites so that it is copy/pasteable? ] (]) 20:45, 20 January 2015 (UTC) |
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