Revision as of 04:03, 8 April 2007 editOrderinchaos (talk | contribs)Administrators70,076 edits reverted to last version by MarcK (fail was by sock of blocked user)← Previous edit |
Revision as of 18:37, 25 April 2007 edit undoMus Musculus (talk | contribs)1,666 edits GA failedNext edit → |
Line 11: |
Line 11: |
|
|{{#ifeq:{{{small|}}}|yes||]}} |
|
|{{#ifeq:{{{small|}}}|yes||]}} |
|
|} |
|
|} |
|
{{GAnominee|2007-03-26}} |
|
{{FailedGA|2007-04-25}} |
|
|
|
|
|
== GA failed == |
|
|
This article needs some more work to get up to GA quality. It is well-sourced, but the prose needs work and some other issues, as follows: |
|
|
* Please get rid of that placeholder image, it is quite unsightly. |
|
|
* There are far too many red links in the article. Consider choosing 2 or 3 that are more likely to become articles soon and remove the rest for now. Or, create stubs for some of them. |
|
|
* The opening sentence is worded in such a way that it sounds like Kensuke Sasaki owns Katsuhiko Nakajima, although I'm sure you mean that Sasaki owns the office. Please reword. |
|
|
* "At just 19 years old, and making his pro debut at 15..." is an awkward phrase, please rewrite. |
|
|
* Lots of stylistic but grammatically incorrect comma usage in the prose. Please obtain a copyedit for comma usage. |
|
|
* The "Career" heading is too long and includes the entire body of prose. Break up into subheadings. |
|
|
* Remove POV commentary about his age like "just 19 years old" and "the young age of 14". |
|
|
* The dates mentioned all need to include years so the statements are durable over time. |
|
|
Thanks! --] (]) 18:37, 25 April 2007 (UTC) |
This article needs some more work to get up to GA quality. It is well-sourced, but the prose needs work and some other issues, as follows: