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| :*] I reworded a few spots on the page that still were pretty close, which Nikkimaria mentioned. I added an in-line citation for the six billion figure (all potential DYK hook information in an article should have a citation immediately following it). I approve all three hooks. I think ALT2 is the funniest. ] (]) 17:02, 4 June 2018 (UTC) | :*] I reworded a few spots on the page that still were pretty close, which Nikkimaria mentioned. I added an in-line citation for the six billion figure (all potential DYK hook information in an article should have a citation immediately following it). I approve all three hooks. I think ALT2 is the funniest. ] (]) 17:02, 4 June 2018 (UTC) | ||
| ::*] Can we get rid of the nation-centric focus by renaming the page ]? ] (]) 22:03, 4 June 2018 (UTC) | ::*] Can we get rid of the nation-centric focus by renaming the page ]? ] (]) 22:03, 4 June 2018 (UTC) | ||
| :::*I'm not fully in favour of that because it might discourage people from adding things about developments outside of China. I think that it would be better at this more general name but I'm willing to concede that if it satisfies people here. ] <sub><sup>]]</sup></sub> 22:23, 5 June 2018 (UTC) | |||
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Cockroach farming
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An American cockroach (Periplaneta americana)
Numerous cockroaches on logs
- ... that artificial intelligence helps run a farm which breeds six billion cockroaches (one pictured) every year? Source: "Six billion cockroaches are being bred each year through artificial intelligence at a Chinese farm"
- ALT1:... that one cockroach farm in China produces six billion insects every year?
- Reviewed: Ken Hodgkisson
Created by Violetriga (talk). Self-nominated at 16:18, 22 April 2018 (UTC).
Article is new enough, long enough, well referenced, and neutral. Hook is verified with reliable source. QPQ is done. Image is freely licensed. One minor paraphrasing issue needs to be fixed: "40 million people have been cured of a variety of ailments by taking the potion on prescription" is too close to the source. -Zanhe (talk) 19:47, 22 April 2018 (UTC)
- A good spot, thanks. Rewritten as "According to a government report, more than 40 million people have been cured of "a variety of ailments" after being prescribed the potion." I don't want to deviate too much from what the source says as it is a little vague. Is that sufficient a change? If not I'll take another look. violet/riga 21:39, 22 April 2018 (UTC)
- I came to promote this, but while it's a very interesting article, the article seems to give overwhelming weight towards China. Could some information be included here about cockroach farming in other countries? Narutolovehinata5 02:32, 3 May 2018 (UTC)
- I've done what I can to balance the article. It is very much a Chinese industry at the moment so sources away from that region are difficult to find. violet/riga 18:43, 3 May 2018 (UTC)
Noted. Since there's nothing that can be done on that end, I'm restoring Zanhe's tick. Narutolovehinata5 03:05, 4 May 2018 (UTC)
I'm concerned that much of the article is closely paraphrased from its sources. Compare for example "seeing it as a cheap source of protein as well as the cellulose-like substance on their wings" with "value the insects as a cheap source of protein as well as for the cellulose-like substance on their wings", or "Cockroaches, like all insects, are not susceptible to the same diseases as mammals or poultry are, and are notoriously hardy" and "Notoriously hearty, roaches aren't susceptible to the same diseases as farm animals". Nikkimaria (talk) 12:43, 5 May 2018 (UTC)
- @Nikkimaria: this has been attended to. violet/riga 14:07, 12 May 2018 (UTC)
- Definitely better, still a bit of work needed. Compare for example "has widely expanded gene families related to taste and smell, to detoxification and to immunity" with "having expanded gene families related to detoxification and immunity". Nikkimaria (talk) 15:37, 12 May 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for your diligence. I have attended to this. violet/riga 11:22, 14 May 2018 (UTC)
- Definitely better, still a bit of work needed. Compare for example "has widely expanded gene families related to taste and smell, to detoxification and to immunity" with "having expanded gene families related to detoxification and immunity". Nikkimaria (talk) 15:37, 12 May 2018 (UTC)
- @Nikkimaria: this has been attended to. violet/riga 14:07, 12 May 2018 (UTC)
Looking for a second opinion on the changes. Nikkimaria (talk) 11:51, 14 May 2018 (UTC)
- I have removed the tag because as far as I can see there is no longer a problem, although it is difficult to be certain with close paraphrasing. Could I suggest a new hook
- ALT2 ... that over a million cockroaches escaped when an unregulated cockroach farm building was bulldozed while the owner was at lunch? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 6:41, 30 May 2018 (UTC)
- I reworded a few spots on the page that still were pretty close, which Nikkimaria mentioned. I added an in-line citation for the six billion figure (all potential DYK hook information in an article should have a citation immediately following it). I approve all three hooks. I think ALT2 is the funniest. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 17:02, 4 June 2018 (UTC)
- Can we get rid of the nation-centric focus by renaming the page Cockroach farming in China? Yoninah (talk) 22:03, 4 June 2018 (UTC)
- I'm not fully in favour of that because it might discourage people from adding things about developments outside of China. I think that it would be better at this more general name but I'm willing to concede that if it satisfies people here. violet/riga 22:23, 5 June 2018 (UTC)