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John S. Loisel

Nominator(s): GregJackP (talk)

I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I feel that it meets the criteria for an A-level article. (GregJackP (talk) 00:10, 3 February 2010 (UTC))

• Object the lead is too short. Secondly the references are repeated in full over and over, which I can fix easily YellowMonkey (bananabucket) 00:28, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

OK, I'll work on the lead & references tomorrow. Did you notice anything else I need to fix? Thanks for your help. (GregJackP (talk) 05:38, 3 February 2010 (UTC))

• Comments
  • Article is currently ranked as B-class, and will therefore need MoS attention, if anyone is up to the task.
  • No problems reported with dab links. One external link is flagged, please check and advise. A handful of images lack alt text, please add this to the article forth with.
  • Your lead is too short, please expand it to at least two paragraphs.
  • Moving with his family early in life could be taken as any time from his departure as a newborn at the hospital to the day before he graduated high school. Please give as a date for the move, at a minimum the year, so we can get some perspective on this.
  • Who were his parents? Did he have any siblings? What did his dad do for a living? Did he work somewhere before enlisting? Did he get a Bachelors/Masters/Doctorate before enlisting? There are no answers to these questions in the early life section, but I have a burning desire to know about this information, so please look into adding it.
  • Five kills makes a man an ace in the air arms, please note this in the article.
  • Was he passed over for promotion to Brigadier General? The article doesn't say, but a man of such caliber would certainly be in a position for stars. See if you can find anything to this extent.
  • The last two lines of the military service section have no source, please add a source for the material or remove it forthwith.
  • Expand the later life section, its rather thin at the moment.
  • Kills 3-8 have no source in the table, please add a source for the information.
  • The entire awards and decorations section is uncited, see about correcting this please. TomStar81 (Talk) 13:43, 3 February 2010 (UTC)