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I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I feel that it meets the criteria for an A-level article. (GregJackP (talk) 00:10, 3 February 2010 (UTC))
- Object the lead is too short. Secondly the references are repeated in full over and over, which I can fix easily YellowMonkey (bananabucket) 00:28, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
- OK, I'll work on the lead & references tomorrow. Did you notice anything else I need to fix? Thanks for your help. (GregJackP (talk) 05:38, 3 February 2010 (UTC))
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- Article is currently ranked as B-class, and will therefore need MoS attention, if anyone is up to the task.
- No problems reported with dab links. One external link is flagged, please check and advise. A handful of images lack alt text, please add this to the article forth with.
- I couldn't determine which external link you are talking about - the toolbox didn't ID any with problems. Can you elaborate so I can fix it? I'll fix the alt text issues. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Your lead is too short, please expand it to at least two paragraphs.
- Will do.
- Moving with his family early in life could be taken as any time from his departure as a newborn at the hospital to the day before he graduated high school. Please give as a date for the move, at a minimum the year, so we can get some perspective on this.
- I don't have any information on this, and can't find anything that has been published. I tried look for census data to at least narrow it down, but haven't had any luck there. Is this something that is required or just nice to have? (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Who were his parents? Did he have any siblings? What did his dad do for a living? Did he work somewhere before enlisting? Did he get a Bachelors/Masters/Doctorate before enlisting? There are no answers to these questions in the early life section, but I have a burning desire to know about this information, so please look into adding it.
- I don't know who his parents were, and have names of two sisters - I'll add those. I do not believe he worked before joining - the bios I've referenced all indicate he went directly from high school to college, but there is nothing definitive. He obtained his Bachelors after WWII (noted in the article with cites) and his Masters on retirement from the USAF (in article with cites). (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Five kills makes a man an ace in the air arms, please note this in the article.
- Done. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Was he passed over for promotion to Brigadier General? The article doesn't say, but a man of such caliber would certainly be in a position for stars. See if you can find anything to this extent.
- He did not attend the Air War College that I can tell, which is a prerequisite for promotion to flag rank.
- The last two lines of the military service section have no source, please add a source for the material or remove it forthwith.
- Will do. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Expand the later life section, its rather thin at the moment.
- Will do. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- Kills 3-8 have no source in the table, please add a source for the information.
- I meant for the cite in the column title 'Kills' to cover all of the kills, but will modify it to show it for each kill. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))
- The entire awards and decorations section is uncited, see about correcting this please. TomStar81 (Talk) 13:43, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
- Will do. (GregJackP (talk) 21:44, 4 February 2010 (UTC))