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Benjamin F. Lewis is currently a World history good article nominee. Nominated by John M Wolfson (talk) at 03:09, 30 March 2019 (UTC) An editor has indicated a willingness to review the article in accordance with the good article criteria and will decide whether or not to list it as a good article. Comments are welcome from any editor who has not nominated or contributed significantly to this article. This review will be closed by the first reviewer. To add comments to this review, click discuss review and edit the page.

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 21:09, 19 September 2019 (UTC)

• comma after Georgia

Done

• On the other hand, he was well known for his propensities for corruption to the extent that his murder had many suspects. awkward

Rephrased

Better, but corruption is not an adjective. Corrupt is an adjective.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

I said "corrupt" in the lead, if I'm not mistaken.

• link to West Side, Chicago, link precinct captain, election judge, county court, South Side, ward committeeman, Roosevelt Road

Done

A better link for county court would be to Circuit Court of Cook County--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

Done

• Capitalize all of United States Unemployment Service as a proper name and de-capitalize second lieutenant as it's not a proper name. Link both terms

Capitalization done, ditto w/ lieutenant link. The Unemployment Service does not have an article AFAIK.

• De-capitalize Housing Inspector

Done

• Throughout his tenure, he encountered yet another irregularity rephrase, not clear

Rephrased

Better, but still passive voice; Lewis made those choices, so he didn't fall into anything.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

More rephrasing

• He would reach tense, "reached"

Done

• he replied that "I stand right at Kedzie and Roosevelt in my ward." What does this mean?

Presumably indifference

• liked to be known substitute "called" for "known"

Done

• He had moved into the office the day before. Awkward, combine with the first sentence in the paragraph

Done

• and having been shot three times tense, "had been shot"

Done

• filed against them on the matter delete "on the matter"

Done

• Lewis's tendency to engage in corruption passive voice, he didn't engage in corruption, he was corrupt.

Done

• would remain vacant tense; "remained vacant"

Done

• Image appropriately licensed
• No DABs, external links OK
• Copyvio acceptable at 27.4%--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:09, 19 September 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for starting the review. I shall address your concerns shortly. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 21:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)

Sturmvogel 66, I believe that's everyone you've said so far. Let me know if you have any more questions! – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 22:14, 19 September 2019 (UTC)

A few issues with using passive voice remain.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 20 September 2019 (UTC)

I have attempted to resolve those issues; please let me know if you have any more specific issues that you need fixed. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 22:30, 21 September 2019 (UTC)

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