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Tone and content
Half of this article reads like a publishing blurb and the other half like a story. Most of it is written in unencyclopedic tone and/or first person story telling format. The whole article is in need of a total rewrite. NeoFreak 14:36, 7 September 2006 (UTC)
Honestly I don't see the point of the plot introduction section when there is a detailed plot summary. Seems like it could be taken out completely. The plot summary seems OK, the only parts I see as problematic are the direct quotations (which seem too specific as compared to the rest of the article) and as you said the first-person and story telling format. It'd be hard to rewrite it without coming out choppy though, "Richard goes... Richard does... Richard finds..." I'm not familiar enough with the book to attempt a re-write, I'd be afraid of the verbs I used inaccurately representing the events. WLU 20:47, 7 September 2006 (UTC)
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