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GA failed
This article needs some more work to get up to GA quality. It is well-sourced, but the prose needs work and some other issues, as follows:
- Please get rid of that placeholder image, it is quite unsightly.
- There are far too many red links in the article. Consider choosing 2 or 3 that are more likely to become articles soon and remove the rest for now. Or, create stubs for some of them.
- The opening sentence is worded in such a way that it sounds like Kensuke Sasaki owns Katsuhiko Nakajima, although I'm sure you mean that Sasaki owns the office. Please reword.
- "At just 19 years old, and making his pro debut at 15..." is an awkward phrase, please rewrite.
- Lots of stylistic but grammatically incorrect comma usage in the prose. Please obtain a copyedit for comma usage.
- The "Career" heading is too long and includes the entire body of prose. Break up into subheadings.
- Remove POV commentary about his age like "just 19 years old" and "the young age of 14".
- The dates mentioned all need to include years so the statements are durable over time.
Thanks! --Mus Musculus (talk) 18:37, 25 April 2007 (UTC)
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